Friday, June 20, 2008

sun to tears
burning down
squinting

wind to soothe
blowing through
cooling

chimes to please
sounding thanks
singing

clouds do shade
growing cool
quickly

3 comments:

how can you have a beautiful ending without making beautiful mistakes said...

each stance is in the form of a haiku. very simple. very Buddha of you.

Bryan said...

I guess they are haiku-like in form, but they lack haiku-ness.

It was a longer and more variable experience than the sort of moment that spawns a real haiku.

how can you have a beautiful ending without making beautiful mistakes said...

true. i guess i'm talking about the new age haiku :) haha.